Blog #7

The student’s essay I picked was the second one. In this essay, Bonnie Nelson, who is a student at ASU, sent a proposal to help change the payment and set up optional classes at the Student Recreation Center (SRC). In this proposal she states problems that all students have. She exclaimed that students do not have a lot of money to be spending extra for workout classes, thirty to sixty dollars to be exact; they also do not have all the time in the world to fit these classes into their schedules due to the inflexible class times. Through research, and interviews with the Director of Campus Recreation, Tamra Garstka, Bonnie Nelson was able to create two different and unique ways to fix this problem. The solutions are as she stated, “First suggestion pertains to grouping the classes together to create a combo pack. The combo pack will allow the students who want to participate in more than one activity for an overall low price. The second suggestion relates to selling a bulk of days a person can attend a group of class, which will allow students who cannot visit one specific athletic class on a consistent bases but uses the pass when it is most convenient for them.”

I believe that bonnie Nelson made a great argument about the Student Recreation Center and why they should be fixed. The reason I believe this is because she actually went and researched her topic, and provided great evidence of why it should be changed. The researched she uses was first her basic knowledge when she is listing a couple of the different classes you can take, and the amount of the classes at the Student Recreation Center, or the different sessions, times, and dates the classes are. She had an interview with the Director of Campus Recreation, Tamra Garstka, in order to figure out why they were charging this much money, how much revenue it brought in each year, and if they could lower it. Yes I believe it could be a little stronger through more statistics pertaining to how many students actually attend these sorts of classes like zumba, and how much it actually costs to run each class, or if they are free to run. Also you have to take in account there are people who would not see eye to eye with her and you need to have a great argument to not deter people away from you. A person she mentioned who would actually be in opposition would be the people who work there and actually get paid through the revenue from those classes. Unfortunately she doesn’t do a very solid job of appealing to ethos, and I think it was because she was sending in a formal letter where logos would be a more appropriate means of argument. When it comes to this group of people but she does give great examples of logos. With this and the great research done by her I feel like it could a good model for our proposal assignment. Overall I thought it was a well-put together argument with great research and examples of logos rhetoric.